Workshop - Enlightener body soap rewrite

Veneese Mollison

Commercial (:60)

The Enlightener body soap - REWRITE

Teacher 1: Ok class, your homework for the weekend is to read chapters seven and eight. Then answer questions one through ten in the back of the book.

Students: Awww, man! But it’s Friday Mrs. Burns!

Teacher 1: I can always add ten more questions. Anymore comments?

SFX: (dismissal bell rings)

Teacher 1: Have a good weekend class.

Teacher 2: Hey Mrs. Burns.

Teacher 1: Oh hello Mr. Moore.

Teacher 2: A few of us are going out for pizza and beer. Want to join us?

Teacher 1: No thanks. I have a date with The Enlightener.

Teacher 2: Are you sure? We all need to blow off a little steam after dealing with these kids.

Teacher 1: Maybe next time. I’ll see you guys Monday.

SFX: (car door closes, horns and sounds of traffic)

SFX: (house keys jingling, door closes)

Teacher 1: Whew! I cannot wait to wash the stress of the day away.

SFX: (turns on the shower)

Announcer: After a long hard day, you need something to help you unwind. The Enlightener body soap is just the thing. The aromatic scent will help calm you down according to aroma-therapist. So the next time you have a particularly rough day, grab The Enlightener and let your troubles go down the drain.

Teacher 1: Ahhh, that’s more like it. I love The Enlightener, it’s the best part of my day.