Thursday, June 13, 2013

Home - Essay (Rewrite)


ORIGINAL

Brian Woodworth
Home – Essay
Time (:60)

“HOME IS WHERE THE HEART IS”, BUT WHERE IS HOME? I COME FROM DETROIT, MI AND NOW LIVE IN CHICAGO, IL. DOES THAT MAKE CHICAGO MY HOME OR IS IT DETROIT? I LEFT DETROIT, MI TO START MY ADVENTURE AT COLUMBIA AND THIS IS MY FIRST YEAR LIVING HERE YEAR ROUND. SO WAIT, IS CHICAGO MY HOME? BUT HOLD ON A SECOND, I WAS BORN IN DAVIS, CA AND MOVED TO DETROIT WHEN I WAS 2 YEARS OLD. SO IS DAVIS, CA MY HOME? NOT ONLY WHERE IS HOME BUT WHAT IS HOME? WHAT CONSTITUTES WHERE YOUR HOME IS? IS IT WHERE YOU ORIGINATE FROM? IN THAT CASE, HOME WOULD BE DAVIS, CA FOR ME. OR IS IT WHERE YOU CURRENTLY LIVE? BECAUSE IF THAT’S WHAT “HOME” MEANS, THEN CHICAGO IS MY HOME. OR WAIT, IS IT THE PLACE THAT YOU’VE LIVED THE LONGEST? BECAUSE THEN I WOULD CONSIDER DETROIT, MI IS MY HOME. SO WHAT DOES HOME MEAN TO YOU AND WHERE IS YOUR HOME?

REWRITE

Brian Woodworth
Home – Essay
Time (:60)

Where is your home?
I come from Detroit, Michigan and now live in Chicago, Illinois. Does that make Chicago my home or is it Detroit?
I left Detroit to start my adventure at Columbia College Chicago and this is my first year living in Chicago year round. Sooo, is Chicago my home?
But hold on a second, I was born in Davis, California and moved to Detroit when I was two years old. So is Davis my home?
Not only where is home but what is home? What constitutes where your home is? Is it where you originate? In that case, home would be Davis for me.
Or is it where you currently live? Because if that’s what “home” means, then Chicago is my home.
Or wait, is it the place that you’ve lived the longest? Because then I would consider Detroit my home.
So what does home mean to you and where is your home?

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